"PAY ATTENTION" (pg 365)
Central claim: "This thing I have is neurobiological; it has nothing to do with my attitude." (pg. 365)
My claim: "This article is written as an informative piece telling people that ADD is not something people can help so deal with it and accept that people have it." (pg. 1)
My revised claim: This article does make a good point for those who do not have ADD, do not assume people with it are disruptors or purposefully dont pay attention. A lot of the time it can not be helped.
My conclusion: : "She chose to take what she has and maike it part of who she is and has written about it in such a strong way that it leaves the reader thinking that we should view ADD differently than how the public perceives it."
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I think you have a decent thesis statement and include good examples from the text. I also think it was good to include a personal example. Your paper was fairly easy to follow and you probably could've combined the next to last paragraph with another one because it was kind of short. Good for a draft :)
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